Answer: No.
I would not get advice from non-clients.
(I was once told to not take advice from broke, unhappy people - which is good advice. I don't know if she is in either category, but the advice is good)
If she is someone who you would not want to take on as a client, then - great. We WANT a power statement that is repelling to her.
Your ideal client will be attracted to you and your statement and what and how you do it. Someone who is offended by wording, does not have that bad of a problem that she would be looking for help.
We had someone come to our Call #1 who didn't like that I used the word "soul-satisfying". She did not get a call #2. I am going to use this word. But she does not have to like it or listen to it. It can be helpful to qualify/disqualify people.
The main thing of a P.S. is that it resonates with you, rolls off your tongue, and it is clear who you help and what problem you solve and results you deliver.
Others will be upset that you say "women" or "healthcare" or "weight" etc. blah blah blah.
The response is "Thank you for sharing." π